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Sunday, January 30, 2011

Sunday Scribblings - January 30th 2011

This is my first post for Sunday Scribblings, a site where a weekly prompt is given. The prompt for this weeks is: Safe. I originally wrote this one a while ago and just changed it a little tonight. 


Transformation 


The door slammed shut 
behind me 
locked 
the key gone 


So suddenly I know 
there will be no turning back 
for a while I have ventured 
holding doors open 
grasping tight the keys 
testing out this different world 
going on mini adventures 


Yet now
this is not the Narnia 
of my childhood fantasies 
an adventure followed 
by a return to home 
it is not like travel to faraway places 
the comforts of home 
waiting


No 
I am here to stay 
the door is locked 
my safety left behind 


I will learn to live here 
transform 
from a tourist 
to a permanent resident 
in a new home 
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15 comments:

  1. Jae RoseJanuary 30, 2011 at 10:25 PM

    What a great piece to welcome you to Sunday Scribblings - I love the sense of how adventure feels when you are grown - and how home becomes what you have to create for yourself..lovely words..Jae

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  2. LilibethJanuary 30, 2011 at 11:30 PM

    A vivid moment and an overwhelming sense of recognition as we have been there. That's the job of a good poem though, isn't it.

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  3. Kodjo DeynooJanuary 31, 2011 at 12:11 AM

    I like the layout of this poem, how it draws one in

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  4. AltonianJanuary 31, 2011 at 2:29 AM

    Very telling poem. I may have got this wrong but- what was the sentence?

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  5. Understanding AliceJanuary 31, 2011 at 2:32 AM

    eventually safety has to be left behind , even if it is just for a while or we never get anywhere new!

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  6. ererJanuary 31, 2011 at 5:00 AM

    Welcome to Sunday Scribblings :)

    That's a neat write up. Liked it! Hope to see more of your posts :)

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  7. UnknownJanuary 31, 2011 at 7:22 AM

    Thanks for the comments and the warm welcome. I look forward to future Sunday Scribblings inspiration!

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  8. Other MaryJanuary 31, 2011 at 8:16 AM

    this is not the Narnia
    of my childhood fantasies

    Great lines- great write.

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  9. LeiffyVJanuary 31, 2011 at 10:41 AM

    Very nice, I like it. Well woven and a fantastic offering for your first Sunday Scribblings! Hope to see more, thanks for sharing!

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  10. Old EggJanuary 31, 2011 at 2:16 PM

    Narnia may well be safer if as Altonian suggests you didn't willing enter your new abode. Intriguing piece to offer up, hope there is more to come.

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  11. KateFebruary 1, 2011 at 11:49 AM

    Really well done-- I am fully intrigued.

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  12. UnknownFebruary 1, 2011 at 12:18 PM

    Happy to have provided some intrigue. When I wrote this I was thinking about a personal change of how I am in the world rather than a particular place. It's been very interesting to reread it after reading everyone's comments. Thankyou.

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  13. Natalie Jean KelseyFebruary 3, 2011 at 2:42 AM

    Posted at 10:10, make a wish :) Beautiful..

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  14. Vinay Leo R.February 3, 2011 at 4:24 AM

    like the bride's thoughts when she enters her husband's home going away from her own.. very nice..

    mine is here:
    http://leonnyes.wordpress.com/2011/02/02/little-dreamer/

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  15. -Hynz-March 27, 2011 at 9:05 AM

    beautifully written. :)

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